Bitten In The Dark!

Hi readers!

As you know, Witch Dark was published in December. Now, I am writing its sequel, Bitten in the Dark and would like a some feedback. Who better to ask, than the folks who reads my work?

Below is a small extract of my work, the starting few paragraphs of chapter two actually, and is like to know what you think of them. Please keep in mind that this is an unedited draft.

Here it is:

His golden fur was thick, protecting him against the thick thorns of the roses that lay strewn across the ground. His paws felt hot and dry in contrast to the ice-cold soil but he ignored it; there was a bigger problem to deal with.

The scents of the ancient pathways were always overwhelming. The wolf lifted his nose and was instantly overcome with fresh smells drifting over him in torrents, brought to him by the whistling breeze.

Rabbits and other small mammals were frolicking somewhere behind him, unaware of the danger they were in – that there was a predator nearby. Birds were singing up on their branches, collecting their dirtied twigs for extra warmth, and then there was the scent of wolf – the smell of his pack members carrying out his orders.

But even those smells were overwhelmed by the stench, by the ashen scent of death and evil that lay beneath him. Jordan’s ears pricked forwards as he stepped toward the darkened ground. No light had reached here and it wouldn’t for some time.

So... What do you think?

You can post a comment, leave a message on my Facebook or Twitter, even send an email. I'd love to eat your thoughts!

Remember that this is an original piece of work; I'd ask for you not to copy it or use  it elsewhere.

Thanks guys xxx